The boy at the beach tried to do a flip and cracked his back. Me and a bunch of kids that were playing on the groyne were trying to keep our balance on the slippery rocks. The groyne looks like a big meteor.
As the kids where swimming a big wave swept them to the shore. The kids where swimming in the water and having a good time.
When we where eating our lunch we saw room 16 eating lunch next to us on the blue sheet. Sadly I heard my friend say it was time to go. the school picnic was very fun.
As the kids where swimming a big wave swept them to the shore. The kids where swimming in the water and having a good time.
When we where eating our lunch we saw room 16 eating lunch next to us on the blue sheet. Sadly I heard my friend say it was time to go. the school picnic was very fun.
Hello Lee,
ReplyDeleteThat would be a good paragraph Lee, if you did have a bit more punctuation in there. Like when you say 'As the kids were swimming, a big wave swept them to the shore.' Can you see where I have put the comma? Oh and maybe you should re-read your work and correct your spelling mistakes. Otherwise this was a great story Lee.
Love from Chante.
Hi lee
ReplyDeletecool story was it that fun